I want to be like water.
Water has a quiet power, an ever-realized presence, a sound with no force, an ability to move and be solid.
If I could be water I would slide through your cracks, inhibit your crevices and then become solid within them.
I would vaporize so that you could breathe me in and taste my smoke.
I can’t manipulate water; I am not graceful or flowing.
I am made of flesh and bone that refuses to adapt, refuses to recreate itself.
No matter how much I want it to.
No matter how much I want to become everything that you are.
This stubborn flesh hides my thoughts behind watery eyes, my tongue forbids my speech and again
I wish I were water.
That my words spilled out.
Truth be told I would love to witness their birth, these words.
For I myself don’t know their final form.
Sometimes I feel as though their sheer utterance may keep me from bursting.
I wonder if there is something wrong with me, possible glaring abnormalities, differences that I should be paying attention to.
The two of us.
we are a puzzle with half the pieces missing, as if we took them and shook them and dumped them in the river and now have decided to scour the world in search of their remnants.
They would have been warped by the river, and even if by some miracle we came upon them.
They would not be the things they once were.
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I wish I can be a water too. ? Anyway, that was beautiful! I can feel you when I was reading this. ??? Oh but by the way there should be an *e* in the word breath
“I would vaporize so that you can breathe me in” ?
oh thank you! typos are the devil lol
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thanks for sharing 🙂
Beautifully expressed !! Your posts are always so amazing !!
Hey I am a begginer here
Can someone tell me what type of material should be written here.Please
Hi Manvi, if you mean in the comments section it’s just whatever you wanna say
Oh I see. Thanks a lot for your reply
Wow!! That’s is amazing to have the creativity to be water, and to use different elements in which is described for water. So far so good.
Anything you feel
Beautiful words. Might I add..
I want to be as thin as water, so that I can do kung fu like Bruce Lee.
Like a once said.. “Be like water my friend”
thanks for reading 🙂
It felt as though somebody were inside my head and narrating out my thoughts to me. Beautifully written. Poignant!
thanks so much!
The words are so beautiful and flow so effortlessly just as water. Love the poem 🙂
thank you 🙂
I really enjoyed the piece….great work??
thank you 🙂
I liked it! 🙂
Very careful selection of the words. I wish i were water too and be more adaptable.
thank you 🙂
Several lovely lines in here, Miri, like “so that you could breathe me in,” and “That my words spilled out.” Well done.
thank you 🙂
This is too beautiful. So relatable!
Hey! Its wonderful. I wish i was water too. ? water, with the ability to flow and still be solid! Adorable ?.
Wow. Amazing. It felt like we were flowing through each other. I imagined you reading it against an almost silent background, just the trickle of a stream.
I loved the thought behind this. 🙂
Holy bejebus that’s amazing
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U write Best
And we are water … at least 80% 😉
lol this is true
That was so inspiring ❤
This is brilliant and personal in that way where people can really relate to it even though it’s specific, and yeah, beautiful
thanks so much danny!
This is beautiful.
So beautiful , your post was amazing!
The way you look at something so common as water is what amuses me!
Loved it ❤
The way you describe water here is brilliant.
Next time I make a cup of tea I’ll think of you
just makes sense, beautifully written.. “If only i could be water, take all the shapes and forms i want”.
That’s really beautiful one ?
Read mine too
What a nice post! I tried to be a water while reading and felt good. Thanks.
I LOVE your writing!!!
This is the first thing I’ve read here. Now I an both glad to be here and glad I stopped by to read this beautiful poem. I love the part about the puzzle pieces not fitting together after being effected by the water that you so long to be. Beautiful imagery,
thanks so much 🙂
It’s a good one. I like?
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This is amazing!
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Wow! This is amazing and I love how beautifully you described water with life 🙂
I love it so much
Beautiful and rough. I like it, and I also walk away feeling a little raw, as if what is hidden underneath the surface, protected, has been scraped open and exposed. It’s uncomfortable, and yet, it is truth – a painful reality that cannot always be hidden from. Thank you for sharing your words, and your vulnerability.
thanks for your comment, gives me something to think about too 🙂
The title grabbed me – your writing style is beautiful!
Beautiful! So amazing?
This is so thoughtful !
Immensely beautiful and so well written!Loved the choice of words and the feeling.
This is so thoughtful and in-depth.
You capture your reader so well and i can’t seem to do that, if you have any tips for a rookie like me please feel free to share 🙂
write everyday even if it sucks, and post it anyway. Also read Stephen King’s on writing, changed my life 🙂
Thank you so much for the tips, I will read that and will keep posting.
wow, what a great piece! Write like you are slamming a door indeed!! Thanks for sharing this.
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??I wish I were water too?
This post is very nice. I really enjoyed it.
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I loved this!! So creative and so passionate
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More than water, the person’s mind which gave those words is beautiful…More than the beautiful mind, water is awesome
True and beautiful thoughts .. awesome your post was
This is so amazing.
thank you 🙂
This is simply so beautiful.
thank you 🙂
Well written. I wouldn’t never thought like this but I can relate so much!
This is amazing. I have been writing poetry since I was in the 9th grade and I got to say that you have skills. I am new to wordpress, but once I get the hang of things I will be sharing some of my poetry. Great stuff. Thanks for sharing.
Superb – The abstract in image form
thank you 🙂
The water could even give a reflection…Reflect an emotion emotionally..fight for fight and tears for tears
Beautifully written and what I liked the most is how I could relate to it so well. Amazing Work!
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This was beautiful ❤
Gorgeous post. I love the imagery and yes, I want to be like water too.
I wish i were water?
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If you like it please do let me know.
And I hope you will keep giving us such amazing blogs.
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Beautiful expression of thought and feeling! Water is relaxing and deep both therapeutic and dangerous yet mysterious. Water is what we possess alot of within us http://wp.me/p5IK2v-1D
Wonderful… Nothing more can be said.. 🙂
Wonderful, I will save
Wow! Rarely do I come out and declare I LOVE a poem but this is fantastic! You caught me the title. Beautiful!
This is brilliant! I love your writing style.
Thank you 🙂
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This made me feel like I wanted to be like water, too, from the first sentence. Why aren’t we water?!? 🙂 Great job.
Thank you 🙂
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After reading this, I question why we aren’t water (although our body is made up of lots of water)… I share the same poetic views, and I would love to be like water, too. <3
After reading this..I want to be water too! Awesome post…even 1000 likes are less..hope to see more..good luck?????
Great share! Brilliant mind
Talking about flexibility. yeah this is fabulous expression. nice to see more again.
wow ! now I desire to be like water
A thought so beautifully expressed !!!
I want to be water too ???
Beautiful thought. ?
Awesome! I’m sure Bruce Lee said something about being like water or something among them lines. ?
Absolutely stunning!!! I had goosebumps while reading it!
INDEED IT’S A GREAT READ. I NEVER REALLY HAD MUCH TIME FOR POETRY, BUT THIS ONE CAPTURED MY ATTENTION. PLUS I REALLY LOVE THE PICTURE; EXCELLENT CHOICE.
GOD BLESS YOU
जल ही जीवन है,और हमे जिन्दा रहने के लिए इसे बचाना हमारा कर्तब्य है,
water is life, if should live life then save to water
Nice thinking.Your posts are relatable ?
Whenever I read something like this.. It reminds me of what a shitty writer I am.
This is amazing.. 🙂
the only truly shitty writers are the ones who don’t do it 😉
Water, Water and Water. It’s fact of everyone life.
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thanks for sharing!
Beautiful! Felt the emotion!
This was so extremely beautiful
Hi. I loved your style of writing. Your writing is actually like water. You blended your expressions so beautifully with the element. Your emotions flowed like water. It had the pain of a teardrop and the chill of ice too. Would love to read more. ?
thank you! I’ve got about 100 posts on here so there’s plenty more to read 🙂
And the rough grace of a brook as well…
Lol! Great though
I like to be water after reading this and then I can be what I want and flow where I want to. Creative piece of writing. Thanks for sharing it.
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“I wish I were water.
That my words spilled out.”
Such lovely words, I could only wish I had written them 😀
I rarely follow blogs on WordPress, but your writing is just amazing. <3
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Actually, we are like water. We don’t have form, reasons; you see yourself different from how anybody sees you and which is different from how another person sees you. We are dynamic and I love it.
Never stop expressing yourself, it’s vital to a healthy emotional, mental, and spiritual self. Plus you do a wonderful job doing so. It’s very inspiring for others like myself ?
Lovely! I wish I was water.
Very well done.
I especially liked the part about breathing in the smoke.
Very visceral 🙂
Incredibly beautiful and powerful imagery. You are so talented! I honestly aspire to this level of poetic talent 🙂
This is amazing !
Hey guys. I’m trying to follow my dream here as I’m sure most of you are. So if you have a moment please take some time to read this and give me some feedback :). It would mean a lot to a little guy like me in a big pond
This is a beautiful poem! I love the second stanza, “If I could be water I would slide through your cracks, inhibit your crevices and then become solid within them.” We all have a need to be loved completely and wholly and consume others minds and hearts fully. It’s just as important to experience being filled this way by another person. It’s a part of living and experiencing life to its fullest in its greatest joy.
Interestingly enough I looked at this more from an “obsession” angle rather than a true romantic love. But I always find it so cool to see how different people’s interpretations are from what I thought of when I wrote it, it’s the best part. 🙂
Lovely poem ?
Captivatiing from beginning to end…and so relatable…
I’d never thought of water this way….yet I felt it every step of the way. Wow.
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“No matter how much I want to become everything that you are”
This poem by Miri Elm in ‘A Short conversation’ captures the essence of possessiveness and how much obsession to hold everything of the other person is desired, to an extent that can be considered crazy. Read and you will know
You have written the feelings so effortlessly and brought out the feelings of one’s obsession about another and the craving to possess all of it. Reblogged it in vinrama.wordpress.com hope you don’t mind 🙂 thanks
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I am following you for my future writings.
Thanks and follow me back if possible.
Congrats on having your poem on discover.
Very amazing words
this is so strong!! keep going
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I love this it’s beautiful!
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This is so good. So moving and clear, yet there’s a hint of mystery. I think you successfully spill words out really well, but probably not the ones you intended.
this is true
Oh my god, how I can relate to this. I have always wanted to be like water. Amazing read and perspective. Give my blog a read fellow bloggers? Sorry I am new to the community. 🙂
Wow .. amazing
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thanks for sharing!
you’re welcome, I really enjoyed readi
you’re welcome, I really enjoyed reading it.
Amazing words, I can 100% relate to this.
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This is just wonderful..
thanks so much for sharing!
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nice one here!
This is beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. The writing style reminds me of the poem I wrote today for Earth Day: She Smiles; poem in recognition of Earth Day
Beautiful poetry–love the comparison of self to water!
This is beautiful!
It reminds me of a question my friend asked the other day. She said ‘if you could bend any element what would it be’ and I said water with no hesitation. There’s something so magical about it.
Lovely post Xx
thank you 🙂
No problem ?
I really connected with this poem! You are a very skilled and passionate writer, keep up the great work! 🙂
Love your thoughts. ❤️
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Beautiful writing after such a long time. Mesmerising.
Raw emotions… So beautiful!
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The heart of your writing while appearing reasonable at first, did not sit properly with me after some time. Somewhere within the paragraphs you managed to make me a believer but only for a while. I nevertheless have a problem with your jumps in assumptions and one would do nicely to help fill in those breaks. In the event you actually can accomplish that, I will surely end up being fascinated.
Really nice poem – I think this is an awesome premise. If you don’t mind a suggestion, I’d single space and lose all those periods! Nice work, though – you’re a talented writer.
As a fellow self-proclaimed poet, I’m impressed by your mastery over words. Coincidentally, the words of this poem themselves flow like water, a peculiar yet fascinating similarity. I wish you all the best.