She Found It In

She had a first class ticket

She found it in the gutter

She heard there was a place on earth

Was unlike any other

She had old conversations

She wrote them in a book

From time to time she’d rewind

The old words that she spoke

She had one place she wanted to be

Gave up on love at age twenty three

A big white sign she got off the train

Nobody saw her ever again

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Money for Nothing

20 Comments

  2. Sha'Tara
    Sha'Tara on February 9, 2016 at 11:23 pm

    There are so many ways to “travel” through that piece of writing. Smartly put. I like great endings, and that’s a great ending.

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    • Miri Elm
      Miri Elm on February 10, 2016 at 8:22 am

      Thank you sha’tara, and thanks for always leaving such great comments I really enjoy reading them 🙂

      Reply
  5. nansfit
    nansfit on February 10, 2016 at 8:52 am

    Your words are so beautiful.

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  6. amanpan
    amanpan on February 10, 2016 at 11:24 am

    Well done and makes me want to know more of the story.

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    • Lovie
      Lovie on April 30, 2017 at 10:10 pm

      Great article but it didn’t have evenrthiyg-I didn’t find the kitchen sink!

      Reply
  9. Napoleon Nalcot
    Napoleon Nalcot on April 20, 2016 at 8:33 pm

    Beautiful. Reading it aloud creates a singsong everyone wants to hear.

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    • Miri Elm
      Miri Elm on April 20, 2016 at 11:37 pm

      thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it 🙂

      Reply
  10. Dermott Hayes
    Dermott Hayes on August 9, 2016 at 11:25 am

    I don’t know why, perhaps it’s my sense of drama, but I find the ending chilling in its uncertainty. I read too many James Elroy novels, I think. But the 50 word format allows you to do that and you’ve done it so well in ‘She Found it In’.

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    • Miri Elm
      Miri Elm on August 9, 2016 at 3:44 pm

      thanks so much Dermott, glad you enjoyed it 🙂

      Reply

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